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    dots Submission Name: CREATE MEdots
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    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 761



    Description:
       Just some thoughts of mine on how love makes us become a different person and how we tend to mold ourselves to our lovers opinion. Can that be considered love or stupidity?


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    dotsCREATE MEdots
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    Create me in your mind
    Who you think I should be
    For that's what you want
    You haven't asked me

    Create all my thoughts
    Make up my mind
    Give my opinion
    You do all the time

    Create my suggestions
    What you think I should say
    Tell it to others
    You do everyday

    Create all my stories
    Things I have done
    Fill them with lies
    I hope you have fun

    Create my appearance
    Don't have any doubt
    I'll be what you want
    Each time we go out

    Create me for you
    So you can be sure
    That my life is yours
    But mine to endure


    ~bigrig0625~




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      Create me in your mind
    Who you think I should be
    For that's what you want
    [But] You haven't asked me

    The above is the only suggestion I have. Overall very good. I loved it. I think that love is like that though. You get molded either by your own thoughts of how they want you, or by them personally. I think in a way, yes, that can be considered stupidity, cuz in the end they 'love you for who you are'. As always, good work.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the idea behind this and the way u put it to paper or computer. that's beside the point. i really enjoyed this and it reminded me of this song by Linkin Park called "Lying From You". it's about the same thing as ur poem
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the idea behind this too. having someone create your life and no matter what you have to live with what it is. hate the fact that it happens. love the way you told the story.

    bcute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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