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    dots Submission Name: crescent city bluesdots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 672
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 4010



    Description:
       this is me, my little brother, and pj spitting about home. we're all new orleans born and raised. love it or hate it

    August 29th - anniversary of Hurricane Katrina


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    dotscrescent city bluesdots
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    (unknown soldier)
    So much damage as I stare at the aftermath
    Of Katrina and what that womanís wrath did to my habitat
    The storm that left my city less than half intact
    The cityís spell is fading so Iím a fight to bring magic back
    Watch the drama unfold as I take you through tragic acts
    But weíll survive and thrive because here we have a knack for that
    This may be one of my saddest tracks
    Trying to deal with this madness, blacks
    Fire at helicopters so the military blasts us back
    Moving slow but we still crash, collapse
    And start regressing through this max relapse
    As government officials hide the facts, perhaps
    Theyíre trying to box us in, too bad we know the trap is vast
    But some get caught and they cart the bodies away in sacks of trash
    And yet the hustle continues cuz the feds never find the stash of crack
    George W. hates us cuz here he gets bashed in raps
    As we try to get more and hope what we already have will last
    This is Mississippi River Sadness and depression fits the mood
    Iím fighting through this madness, singing my Crescent City Blues

    This is for those who wonder why we plunder
    Trying to fight off this hunger after my city was torn asunder
    By the wind, water, and the crack of the thunder
    Circle the drain, as we get washed down the gutter
    Sick of the feds, bullshit, and blunders
    Somebody help me cuz Iím going under

    (young p)
    N.O. was the place where I had my first celebration
    My first laugh, first tear, first play station
    N.O. was a beast until the Katrina revelation
    We left and it felt like a long vacation
    Going in and out of homing stations
    We became an unsteady nation
    I thank those whose help we were handed
    I mean FEMA helped some people and left others stranded
    God dammit!
    Why did it have to hit my city?
    Donít show me pity
    Iím alright, Iím gonna make it through
    Have pity on those who ainít here with me and you
    You couldnít have tried to walk in their shoes
    I could write all night but now Iím checking out
    You what this rapís about
    Oh yeah
    I canít leave without saying thanks for helping out

    This is for those who wonder why we plunder
    Trying to fight off this hunger after my city was torn asunder
    By the wind, water, and the crack of the thunder
    Circle the drain, as we get washed down the gutter
    Sick of the feds, bullshit, and blunders
    Somebody help me cuz Iím going under

    (Aknahlij_d 1)
    killing time with a rhyme and a whim/
    i take the memories with film cause my clarity is wearing thin/
    and i need heavier gear to weather the cold/
    whether you're old or young, the story is told/
    in the same way, the same slang, same people, on the that same day/
    how we all when crazy by Saturday/
    and
    every other minute, i think of how simple it could've been for the men in charge to help us/
    so we just walk a little more weary when we visit the gyms that a year ago were shelters/
    im still shocked at how my block's so decrepit/
    and the writings on the red bricks are these massive orange x's/
    with either a O or a 1 underneath/
    i pace the beach in a hurry fearing the fluid beneath my feet/
    and i still read papers looking for a FEMA pay day/
    so that these cresent city blues can someday fade to gray/

    This is for those who wonder why we plunder
    Trying to fight off this hunger after my city was torn asunder
    By the wind, water, and the crack of the thunder
    Circle the drain, as we get washed down the gutter
    Sick of the feds, bullshit, and blunders
    Somebody help me cuz Iím going under





    Submitted on 2006-08-30 18:42:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow! did you watch that documentry"when the levys broke"? watching that and finding out all that horrible information about what really went down during Katrina made me sick to my stomach. you know what though, it's never too late to write about it....so that's what I'll do.
    You stated basically everything here, the only thing your missing is about why they didn't even want to fix the broken levy to begin with.
    great, you need to get your [censored] pattented so that it's protected and other people can't still your [censored], it's what i'm about to do.
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      This would make a good rap song if it's not already!





    ~bigrig0625~
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by bigrig0625 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am trying not to cry here. Although, I'm from Baton Rouge, born and partly raised, I can still feel the pain here and relate to the images you speak of due to what I saw on TV. I use to have to go Tulane hospital for cardiac health, and it broke my heart to see it and Charity ruined, I spent time at Charity, hell that place saved my life, and to know it is gone, the I-10...the superdome wrecked. It is just a shame. All 3 of you expressed yourself so well. I loved each part and felt this may be the best work I've seen at Elite. You made momma proud here. This is a fav.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      hot[censored]. P dropped heavy on this one. his flow was kinda off like mine (haha). troid, u did good, once again. i was aiight. coulda been better if i bit off aaron neville, but we can't all be so lyrically gifted as him. They tryna' wash us away, they tryna' wash us away
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey!! this is pretty tight!! it was nice good job yall! im tired peace!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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