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    dots Submission Name: Reverse Executiondots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The wick burning bright,
    A runic light hidden out of sight.
    Azure flame barely touching wax
    Melting pure metal off the shimmering Ax.
    With this Ax I have punished the innocents,
    nostrils fill with salty vermilion scents.
    Washing the blood from my hand.
    Along the river all the headless souls stand.
    The river of Styx flowing black.
    Torment turned, whips lashing off my back.
    My dark hued hood flaps in the wind.
    Empty eyes, Iím finally being punished for my sins.
    Itís my hatred that made the bed.
    Reverse execution when me myself must bow my head.
    My soul and the Ax suddenly grow colder.
    As my head shifts and slides off my shoulders.




    Submitted on 2004-01-26 19:15:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it ! it is interesting to put ourself in the executors shoes when he's executed. and scientist once said that we still see for ten second when our head is cutted off of our body. so every victim of the axe can see the executor one last rime and the executor can see this "regard", The last one.....some historians said that it was because the executors were afraid to be pursued in their nightmares by the victims (or criminas...it depends on how you see them ) that they used to cover their head for the cutting job!
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by Aceofthedice | [ Reply to This ]
      as my head shifts and slides off my shoulders. it's like watching some one about to be beheaded thru a peep hole when you're supposed to be inside with the rest of the kids drinking powdered milk and peas.

    imagery that makes me want to tuck my face in my scarf and pull my hood over my eyes.

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]


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