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A Nightmare I Embrace

Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 126
Class/Type: Poetry /
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I like nightmares.

A Nightmare I Embrace

Silently suffering
waiting for tomorrow
or a knife I could use
to cut out the sorrow
But I think it's to late
to save me from sadness
so I have to fall asleep
to escape from this maddness

And as days grow old
Im waiting for the night
when I can close my eyes
and make everything alright
goodbye misery
rest my sweet tears
I fade to where there are no people
there is no life, no fears

I hope I sleep forever
I hope I dont awake
I like where the world is grey
and everything is fake
but even there I am alone
In a place without a light
and I drift away forever
so until I awake, goodnight.

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  hail to thee

interesting poem. i like the way you use your words.

Nice flow

Blessed be
| Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Icegoth | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really good, i love the concept you put into it. i like the image you make of your dream world. very good keep up the wrok. Joanna
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it and the wording is good. The flow is grate ( a lot better then mine ). I the title and what the poem is about. Thank you.
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by FallenAngle2005 | [ Reply to This ]
  kool i enjoyed how i got to see how the world feels to you and how you wish it werent so sad and upsetting i guess umm but i really did enjoy it your very talented so keep up the good work
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
  Great job with this.. I like how you describe what sleep is to you and how you feel... I like this alot

| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  cat in the hat gone emo
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by understander | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good write, good flow and wording, I feel just like you describe sometimes, good job, keep writing, Dean
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this. very imaginative. the last stanza is fantstic. strange as it sounds,it feels to me as if its a nightmare you dont wont to wake from. good job!!
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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