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    dots Submission Name: A Nightmare I Embracedots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 950
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I like nightmares.


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    dotsA Nightmare I Embracedots
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    Silently suffering
    waiting for tomorrow
    or a knife I could use
    to cut out the sorrow
    But I think it's to late
    to save me from sadness
    so I have to fall asleep
    to escape from this maddness

    And as days grow old
    Im waiting for the night
    when I can close my eyes
    and make everything alright
    goodbye misery
    rest my sweet tears
    I fade to where there are no people
    there is no life, no fears

    I hope I sleep forever
    I hope I dont awake
    I like where the world is grey
    and everything is fake
    but even there I am alone
    In a place without a light
    and I drift away forever
    so until I awake, goodnight.






    Submitted on 2006-08-30 20:24:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hail to thee

    interesting poem. i like the way you use your words.

    Nice flow

    Blessed be
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Icegoth | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good, i love the concept you put into it. i like the image you make of your dream world. very good keep up the wrok. Joanna
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it and the wording is good. The flow is grate ( a lot better then mine ). I the title and what the poem is about. Thank you.
    ~Darlene
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by FallenAngle2005 | [ Reply to This ]
      kool i enjoyed how i got to see how the world feels to you and how you wish it werent so sad and upsetting i guess umm but i really did enjoy it your very talented so keep up the good work
    peace
    Star
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job with this.. I like how you describe what sleep is to you and how you feel... I like this alot

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      cat in the hat gone emo
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by understander | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write, good flow and wording, I feel just like you describe sometimes, good job, keep writing, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. very imaginative. the last stanza is fantstic. strange as it sounds,it feels to me as if its a nightmare you dont wont to wake from. good job!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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