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    dots Submission Name: hot shitdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 641
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1288



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       just me and my brother. he likes to rap off of whatever i write. most of y'all know him as unknown soldier but Retorrikal QuestYunn is just another one of his aliases


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    (young p)
    When I pull a burner they quick to hide
    Stretch and stride to stay alive and survive
    Iíll rob you and leave but I ainít Clyde
    Great with mics like the Jackson Five
    You wanna cook I got the recipe
    Not in a group but especially destined to be a child of destiny
    You little adolescents who need lessons
    Get ignored cuz I donít answer like a Retorrikal QuestYunn
    You niggasí tips is hollow, they just bounce off me
    Leave you in dry blood thatís brown like coffee

    (Retorrikal QuestYunn)
    And the governmentís still trying to stomp me
    But nobody can heal my magical wounds like Madam Pompfrey
    To free my people from oppression
    The task seems pretty daunting
    They lead us by our obsessions
    And our truest wishes are pretty taunting
    Wanting to stop the mourning, the tears
    And children addicted to drugs use persuasion to keep conforming their peers
    Would the Savior be slain in Israel if he was born in a year?
    Iím lost in my doubts, constantly torn by my fears
    Yo, I canít bring a change without the power of the people behind me
    I may not be able to see freedom but I can still reach for it blindly





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      Ok I liked the overall message...good rhyme from the both of you kkeep doin wut u do..later
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Dutchess_aira | [ Reply to This ]
      I must commend this piece. Especially the second verse. Hip hop has gotten too far out of reach. What we hear on the radio...and what is sold on CD's any more....is not the true definition of hip hop. When you can take a situation and put it to rhythm....speak truth and not just trash of guns, hoes, money, and ice....you have hip hop.

    We need more lyricists to speak upon other things. To bring life to the hood, and not fall as a subject to the hood. No body is concerned with the weapons you have and what you can do with them.....if you can shut them up with truthful words.

    Good job.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your raps and your brother's too. It gives a good message to people. Sometimes words are way more powerful than anything else. You guys speak your minds and that's really great! Hey, I'm behind you guys 100%

    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]


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