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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots

    Author: MorbidAngel114
    ASL Info:    20/f/Behind you
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 445/480/114
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Just felt like writing something.

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    It has begun
    The wretched realization
    The horrid contemplation
    That he is gone

    I use to have a light
    Once had shown me the way
    But now there’s only dark
    Where did my lamp go?

    Ah…I remember
    It left the day he did
    As did my offenses

    Now what?
    Where am I to turn to now?
    A best friend of his,
    Whom I know very little?

    Stupid me,
    Questioning the ways…

    I once was alone
    I once stood my ground
    I can do it again now
    Can’t I?

    Before you leave again
    Answer me this question
    What am I to say,
    To all these ghouls of today?

    Submitted on 2006-08-30 22:04:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was good, and it captured the way you feel about your man going off to college perfectly. I'm taking it he placed his friend to watch over you? If so, that's so sweet.

    You used a lot of good words to pain a picture of uncertaintity and a little fright. I enjoyed it Kat.


    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it...has a lot of meaning...im impressed
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Poetic Ways | [ Reply to This ]
      Made me think of how I'd be if my bf seperated wow...I enjoyed this alot though I not sure what the "he" is see this is one of those confusing moments where i feel stupid but i like this sooo much i'm gonna add it as a fave later
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Dutchess_aira | [ Reply to This ]
      the ending is awesome. and not just because i like ghosts. good job, i really like this piece.
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]

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