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    dots Submission Name: *Barriersdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 749
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       this is just a little something i though of last night...itz not finished yet but feel free to comment and tell me what u think so far

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Your lips, so close to mine but off limits
    Your hand, just inchs away yet untouchable
    Your gaze, focused intently on another girl
    Me, longing for you to look at me that way

    Submitted on 2006-08-31 06:58:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem was really really really really well written lol, short but says alot and ill email you on wat i think about it cuz thats private;) and yea good job keep writting.

    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooo I liked this! Yes, I know the feeling :( The frustration and confusion it causes are so very painful and unconsolable.......

    great write! I am reading the rest of yours now...seems like we have something in common.

    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by Suffer Well | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good I enjoyed it. You were able to create a flow with the words that stirred that exact emotion, and perhaps a memory, in the reader. I'm sure we've all felt this way about someone. I know I have.

    You captured it well. A simple picture in a short amount of words. Talent.

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhhhhh, i know i know i know!
    it drives me CRAZY!
    especially when they're really close to you!
    ahhhh, its simple, sweet, and means anything it can.
    it works and i dont mind it.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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