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    dots Submission Name: *When youdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots*When youdots

    When you look my way,
    Do you feel passion,
    Or is it just me?

    When you look at me,
    Do you see me for who I am,
    Or for who you will mold me into?

    When you kiss me,
    Do you want more,
    Or are you happy with what you get?

    One day you wont be a mystery anymore
    But when will that day come?

    Submitted on 2006-08-31 09:27:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think this poem was interesting, i can c wat u mean in it i think, ur tryin to find out wat the guy is thinking when he kisses you or looks at u but that will always be a mystery, good writing keep it up.

    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, controlling partner in the relationship. Always guessing if he's going to love you for you and it's true, or he's trying to change you and break you. Been in those type of relationships.

    Buncha BS.

    But, this was another awesome poem from you. I enjoy your work greatly.

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      This was interesting. I think it greatly portrays what most women think in a relationship. Most guys change them into who they want them to be and want more than what they have. This hit that right on the spot, which was really good. Not sure if what he feels is the passion or just the thought of your body. Not sure if what he see's is you or what he wants you to be and wants to change you into. Not sure if he's happy with just a kiss, or if its not enough to satisfy him, and it should be more than enough. One day his true intentions will be showed and he'll show his true side.

    This was really good.
    Thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the poems you girls write because they're so much different from mine. If everyone wrote like me it would be like chewing corks to read them. I adore how you girls are all about love and relationships. I think it's cute!

    Loved the poem,

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by bigrig0625 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think anyone ever asks these questions to the person they like; and choose instead to write about it. I would have prefered this if there were fewer questions. Otherwise, this was thought-provoking.

    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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