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    dots Submission Name: bleeddots
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    Author: stateXofXmind
    ASL Info:    18/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.09 - 29/49/21
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 557



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       this is just how i feel sometimes when my mom and other people i love say something that makes me feel like shit...


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    i want to bleed for you
    to prove my love to you
    i want to bleed for all the
    times i ever hurt you
    i want my blood to drip down
    so you can see exactly
    what you mean to me
    i want to bleed,
    bleed for all the breath
    you wasted on me
    i want to bleed
    i want to die so you can see
    how much you lean to me
    i want my heart to stop
    because your too good for me
    i want to bleed so you can see
    exactly what you mean to me
    i want to bleed




    Submitted on 2006-08-31 13:16:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Eh...soso......keep it up (:-S)
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Ellie Schneider | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem almost has a sort of hypnotic trance to it.
    Well written, a little repetative, but that adds to the effect.
    I enjoy reading your poems, they remind me of days long past.
    Write on.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      this was emotional. but why bleed? is what people say to you so affected with filth and ill will that it makes you want to die?

    what people say is their opinion in most cases but when it becomes something that makes a person yearn for pain and even death then it is wrong. what they say to you is in no way important after they hurt you. i'm sorry if i seem cold when i say this but, these people who make you feel like [censored] are not deserving of you.

    a person is not a thing to be toyed with or hurt. all life is precious and important. from the smallest child to the oldest soul. when ur life is treated like insufficent waste then it is time to sever all ties.

    you are a person with a beautiful soul and that is clear in this poem. you want them to see you and not your mistakes or flaws. if they can't do that then they aren't worth the time.

    the poem was very good. you showed that you have a potential that should not be ignored.

    P.S. sometimes repetition is key. :)

    best wishes,
    ~My Tragedy~
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Brimora_gira | [ Reply to This ]



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