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    dots Submission Name: This Inferno That Lives Withindots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThis Inferno That Lives Withindots
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    So its like that?
    Mistakes made in the past
    Cannot escape the present
    Simply because you won't allow it
    I've moved on
    But you cannot surpass such minor mistakes
    My emotions twril up
    Kendling themselves insde
    As if its an inferno within this soul of mine
    An inferno with you and I
    Battling....at wits ends
    You won't give in
    You simply won't let go of those mistakes
    I can't allow myself to look past those cheap shots you throw at me
    I can only take so much
    I can only remain silent for so long
    This battle between you and I
    Will eventually come to an end
    This inferno within me will soon come to a closure..
    But its the War that counts!




    Submitted on 2006-08-31 15:56:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think that you were looking for, Inferno.
    Not being critical, but thats how you spell it.
    A well written poem.
    It was quiet intersting.
    Write on.
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]


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