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    dots Submission Name: Obligationsdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
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    To this family I live with I have these responsibilities
    To the full time job I bust my ass for
    I have committed myself to their endless chores
    But as for society...screw them
    Fashion is only a put down to the majority of us
    Popularity remains in high school
    Although we simply move our way up
    Fighting one another over higher ranking potions in the working field
    Our flaws are pointed out in every possible way
    For society has no hart
    And we fall victim to its hate
    Only critizing one another
    For our wrongs
    Rather than to praise one another for our "rights"
    We're all equally guilty...
    But we are simply victims...to its hate

    Submitted on 2006-08-31 15:56:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn Jackie, it's really hard to bash a well written poem, I couldn't agree more with what you say, I would have to say this is a very good piece. it's going in my favorites, Keep writing.

    Your Friend, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      Fantastic and so true, thanks for telling it how it is and how much society as a whole sucks balls.
    I like the whole poem every line.
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah! or no...i dunno, i think society sucks, but i refuse to bash a perfectly good piece just for the sake of bashing...that would be wrong...
    keep writing, i cant wait to read more!
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      erm........i cant bash this. its written so well and i agree with everything you said.
    we seem to be drowning in obligations, but does ANYONE stop to say 'hey, thanks, good job'? no, coz they're busy pushing you out the way to get to the top first. i totally agree. and very well said.

    But we are simply victims...to its hate

    that rounds it up. in fact that one line kinda says it all.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      You must be unappricated at your household.
    If anything the wife of the house should be treated with respect.
    Now i don't know whats going on in the house you live in.
    But obviously, its something wrong.
    But maybe i'm wrong.
    Just a thought.....
    A liked the venting type poem, mixed in with a little political satire.
    The satire didn't have as much depth.
    But the Screw Society part rocked.
    Write on.
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, i was suppose to bash this piece...............................ummmmmmmm.
    Well it sucks.
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]

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