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    dots Submission Name: alabasterdots
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    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Spinning glass of Alabaster
    bright white rope entwined
    against the black, it's spinning faster
    it twirls about my mind

    Lilting sickly to and fro
    my stomach lifts and sinks
    a sticky pull, I fall then grow
    a sweating roiling stink

    Pulsing heat and pressing steam
    and bloody fingernails
    I push you away and hear my screams
    and senseless hollow wails

    So I try to forget about you
    and put you on a shelf
    but I realize I'd rather be alone with you
    than be alone with myself




    Submitted on 2006-08-31 16:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, so deftly done! A wonderful and insistant cadence throughout...superb rhyme and some great meter--not to mention a fine vocabulary--loved it, loved it! bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your talent shines through again in this one. Clear, concise and put together perfectly.

    A joy to read from you as usual.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of your pic at the top of the page. You know... something trying to break free. I love all the feeling you put into your writing! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]


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