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    dots Submission Name: Lifeís Pastelsdots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Paint a picture with words

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    dotsLifeís Pastelsdots

    Faith is an illusion of the blind.
    Feeling the walls no hand hold to find.
    Lost in the realm of trust.
    On the empty canvas life was brushed.
    Paint dripping transfixed in the air.
    Life is trembling it is barely there.
    We all fall and fade away.
    Iíll wait with you halting lifes decay.
    My pictures paint falls upon your foot.
    You kneel and wipe the paint away taking with it my hurt.
    Paint smears on your arms.
    Itís getting on your necklace of charms.
    My paint covers your body making you a colorful blurr.
    From my canvas to your soul paint transfers.
    My portraitís lines were never straight.
    But now upon you they begin to radiate.
    In pastels of the color spectrum all different shades.
    You are Loveís masterpiece in which my mind I have made.

    Submitted on 2004-01-26 19:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's pretty ethereal, which i like. the elusive painter swinging from the rafter's of his/her loft throwing buckets of paint at the canvas imagining a love so grand...but i see, or i think i see that the love doesn't exactly turn out as planned.

    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      damn man, you can get lost in this poem, w/all the images going on and the emotion flowin around, strangley this seems like it could be a love poem of sort, gr8 job on this one man
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      Truly a work of art :) Your words do seem to paint a picture for me. I like your imagery, but your metaphors are powerful. Pastels... I like that word. "We all fall and fade away." Great metaphor :)
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]

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