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    dots Submission Name: The Cycledots

    Author: darkened_soul
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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       The cycle
    By: Jaime Lee

    This is my newest form of poetry. Freeverse!

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    dotsThe Cycledots

    Life. Much of the life I've grown to know is lies. Lies. So many covering the world, like a plague. Plague. A word used to describe some mass horror. Horror, the perfect word to describe life.

    There it goes.
    An endless cycle.

    We're trapped in the middle. But there are no boundaries. How are we trapped? Can you be trapped when nothing surrounds you? When there are no walls, are you actually in the middle?

    There it goes again.
    Another endless cycle.
    The same question asked many times.
    The middle-boundaries-trapped-walls-the middle.


    You can't escape. Escape. You want to from this cycle. Cycle. The word used to describe repitance of something endless. Endless, just like you're plan to escape it all.

    When you thought you were safe.


    Then you can escape the boundaries and forget the cycle. Keep running. Wait, now you've got a new cycle. Running. Hiding. The more you run, the less you espace. You've created a new cycle.


    So you thought you could escape.
    Give up.
    You can't fight it.


    The cycle will then run from you. Freedom, you'll become alive.


    Submitted on 2006-08-31 16:55:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this poem- kinda dark (the ones I'm drawn to).. and freeverse was something I don't read often so I liked that. It's like you took every emotion you had from a bad day & rolled it into this poem... kudos friend, kudos.

    <3 Jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]
    I've been thinking for a while about how to be free since you posted this. It's kind of haunting me.
    I'll ride the spiral to the end, to quote 'Tool'. Today I'll start running.
    This freeverse thing read really naturally

    A useless comment but hey, I was thinking about this so it's worth commenting on .
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by -YonY- | [ Reply to This ]
      this seemed more like a journal entry then a poem. amazing either way but it really doesn't seem like a poem. its almost telling a story based completely on your own views. but i suppose even a post like this can be poetry to the writer so i'm not going to give anymore feedback. aot of emotion, alot of things to make people seriously stop and think. finally writing again and trust me... the talent is still there!
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by speedrocketguit | [ Reply to This ]

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