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    dots Submission Name: The Warfaredots

    Author: Aelfled
    ASL Info:    15/girl/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 58/48/18
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This spiritual warfare stuff isn't just poetic. It's real. And anyone who doesn't believe it will learn it the hard way some day. Watch out people, there is a Jesus Christ and there is definitely a Satan!

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    dotsThe Warfaredots

    I hear the thunder boom
    I see the lightning strike
    The day is sunny
    Not a cloud in the sky

    A tornado is blasting through
    Taking out all that is good
    An earthquake is shaking
    Breaking apart the rocks and mud

    A slight breeze is blowing
    I can smell the grass
    The wildlife is flitting about
    That a storm is going on no one would guess

    For this storm outsiders cannot see
    The thunder they cannot hear
    The lightning they can't see strike
    They know nothing, only a deadly fear

    It is a raging battle taking place
    A war between flesh and Christian
    A turmoil understood only by Believers
    To give in or to hold strong, that is the question

    The flesh will betray you
    Yet that path is easier
    Holding strong will benefit you
    But the pull of flesh is a teaser

    It's grip is very strong
    But we must hold up
    We fix our eyes on Christ
    And dangle from the thread of hope

    Reaching and scrambling
    The Helping Hand is in sight
    One more leap and we'll be safe
    We have almost won the fight

    The race is long
    But we must endure
    Our hearts are tired
    But we must not allow the world, us to lure

    Keep serving where He puts us
    Focus on Him alone
    For the race is almost over
    And He'll take us home

    Submitted on 2006-08-31 17:24:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to what you say here, and almost can feel your frustration knowing some people will choose the easy path. This sounds alot like a long version of my write 'Age Of Rot'. You are right there is a war going on that so far is unseen to nonbelievers, and I hope they see it and take up arms before this fight takes them by surprise. You have put it together pretty well here, and I have no suggestions for changes. Nice one.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]

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