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    dots Submission Name: Global warming local ragedots
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    Author: Lafferty
    ASL Info:    18/ female/perth WA
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 39/20/15
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 588
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    Description:
       I am from the South west of Australia where every climatic model, that usually have discrepancys, indicate significant drying. farmers in the 50's and 60's had to clear land to be able to keep leases. The south west also is a biodiversity hotspot with 6 types of woodland/forest ecosystem in roughly the area of france which rely on high rainfall. In august the last month it should be cold and rainy


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    dotsGlobal warming local ragedots
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    Sweet summer morning
    warm breeze in my curtains

    Is It the dawning
    Of a new world

    When summer breeze
    Comes in August

    What can we do now?
    Last abiding prays

    To a world that can only despair
    Where is the hope of fresh flowers?

    That will no longer be there
    With each year slowly less showers

    Where is the beauty in mirages?

    Last longing looks
    At all that we have took
    From the people who are not yet born

    What about the tree that has lived for six hundred years?

    That dies from a hundred year crime
    what use is the wisdom of age

    Grandfathers action
    Of cutting down trees
    'The government's order dont blame us please'
    Causes grandaghters house to fall into the sea

    I draw breath to lift this pen
    Are my words worth it?




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      well my comment didn't post, so im pissed as [censored], and i'm goign to offer the abbreviated version, i loved the language you have a decent vocabulary on your shoulders keep expanding.

    also the form was both light, comfortable to be read aloud with and aesthetically pleasing.

    this piece's content was also quite thought provoking. i apologize for not being able to offer any more, but ES is quite the homosexual nowadays, and didn't post the comment. but good write nonetheless. i look forward to furutre works.

    Loquacious Mind
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]


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