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    dots Submission Name: Shadowtidesdots
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    Author: Crash
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 1374/490/63
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 1005
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Sometimes we lose the one we love simply because they think the grass is greener on the other side. When they find out that grass has to be mowed too, they try to come back.


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    Shadowtides

    Since you've been gone,
    I'm nothing but a shadow of myself,
    I cry to the sky,
    And deny its reply,
    Lie to my heart,
    A silhouette of an empty shell

    Watch the fire light,
    Dancing with memories of you and me,
    I cry with the sky,
    Flames douse its reply,
    Burning my heart,
    Your cold words haunting shadows of me

    His promises brought to light the tears that I cry,
    They took you away and I pray to God that he lied,
    I hope the tides weren't that high,
    And the moon hung itself and died,
    You'll run back from the sea,
    Haunted by shadows of me

    How many tides,
    Have carried empty seashells in the dark,
    Hold them to your ear,
    Listen to my tears,
    Lie to your heart,
    Tell yourself those echoes don't make this hard

    How many nights,
    Has he made you a shadow of yourself,
    You cry to the sky,
    And fight back those tides,
    I hear those cries,
    Through silhouettes of an empty shell

    Too many tides,
    Have carried our trust too far out to sea,
    We cry with the sky,
    Because the moon died,
    Fire light lost the fight,
    Your begging words haunting shadows of me.




    Submitted on 2006-08-31 20:52:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-07-28 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      It's very good. Really one of the most intelligent pieces I read here. The title is fantastic, the repetition of some words is excellent for making a point. The imagery is also very good. I myself often use the sea and the sky (the sky more often) as a live imagery in my own works. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is amazing! Everything flowed together perfectly with the right amount of emotion laced throughout it. I was entranced, I must admit!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this and wish i could hear it as a song. as a musician myself, i try to put music to the lyrics i read. i can imagine a screaming guitar in here, somewhere, crying in the night.

    great imagery of the sky, the tide, the shells and the flame.

    i love the picture of you and the guitar. we had some rockin' live music over here at our house this weekend. nothin' like live music and original songs.

    well done.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not usually a fan of lyrics, if it's a song, I like to be able to hear the music, too.
    But this had me from the first 6 lines. Very emotional piece, i can feel the yearning in your words, it's beautiful.
    I also love the references to the tides and seashells, they helped describe your feelings so well.
    Great job, would love to actually hear it though!!
    Whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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