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    dots Submission Name: Freshmendots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Being a Teen
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       yeah.. i'm in 9th grade now. and i hate it. I don't see my best friend anymore. and all my other friends are like no where. I'm shy so i'm trying my best to make friends. so yeah.. i can't just go up to some one and start talking to some one.. i'm really lost..

    today i wanted to cry just because i didn't see my best friend.. i called her.. but yeah.. i really miss her..


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    New day and so many faces unknown
    stand alone in a building that is no home
    Emotions challened me
    as i force those tears to not weep

    Friends are no longer friends
    as best friends were separated from you
    crawl under my bed
    as i wish i could stop growing

    Everyones words are to meet new ones
    my big eyes have no answer as i'm only shy
    my feeling arent tought enough
    as i don't want to grow up in this life

    I haven't grown up yet
    Inside i'm still 10 years old
    my heart bled
    and my hands stole
    My eyes have created rivers
    i just haven't grown up yet
    in this new highschool




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      Being shy myself, I know how you feel. But hang in there, love, you'll be alright. You will make new friends and after the old ones gets used to the change, they will come back to you. I hate growing up. I am still 7 years old inside, you just have to learn how to be both the child and the young adult. I want to tell you it'll get easier, but it won't. You will get used to all the changes though. You will be able to better prepare yourself for all the changes that will be coming. I love ya Kay and know you'll do great!

    Now, about the poem. There are some spelling errors. I suggest reading over it, I'm sure you'll see them. The mistakes are ones you make when you are typing fast, trying to get everything out before you forget how to put it. I make tons of them, I make a lot of them in my comments too, but I can't go back and redo those, heh. I am going to tell you again, I can totally relate to what you are saying. You'll be alright. Especially if you are doing all those sports, you'll get sports buddies. I never had any of those, I wasn't big on sports....at all. I hung out in my English teachers room during breaks and lunch....I'm sorta a geek.

    Love ya, hang in there, and have fun!
    Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


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