Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Freshmendots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 814
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 743



    Description:
       yeah.. i'm in 9th grade now. and i hate it. I don't see my best friend anymore. and all my other friends are like no where. I'm shy so i'm trying my best to make friends. so yeah.. i can't just go up to some one and start talking to some one.. i'm really lost..

    today i wanted to cry just because i didn't see my best friend.. i called her.. but yeah.. i really miss her..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFreshmendots
    -------------------------------------------


    New day and so many faces unknown
    stand alone in a building that is no home
    Emotions challened me
    as i force those tears to not weep

    Friends are no longer friends
    as best friends were separated from you
    crawl under my bed
    as i wish i could stop growing

    Everyones words are to meet new ones
    my big eyes have no answer as i'm only shy
    my feeling arent tought enough
    as i don't want to grow up in this life

    I haven't grown up yet
    Inside i'm still 10 years old
    my heart bled
    and my hands stole
    My eyes have created rivers
    i just haven't grown up yet
    in this new highschool




    Submitted on 2006-08-31 22:27:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Being shy myself, I know how you feel. But hang in there, love, you'll be alright. You will make new friends and after the old ones gets used to the change, they will come back to you. I hate growing up. I am still 7 years old inside, you just have to learn how to be both the child and the young adult. I want to tell you it'll get easier, but it won't. You will get used to all the changes though. You will be able to better prepare yourself for all the changes that will be coming. I love ya Kay and know you'll do great!

    Now, about the poem. There are some spelling errors. I suggest reading over it, I'm sure you'll see them. The mistakes are ones you make when you are typing fast, trying to get everything out before you forget how to put it. I make tons of them, I make a lot of them in my comments too, but I can't go back and redo those, heh. I am going to tell you again, I can totally relate to what you are saying. You'll be alright. Especially if you are doing all those sports, you'll get sports buddies. I never had any of those, I wasn't big on sports....at all. I hung out in my English teachers room during breaks and lunch....I'm sorta a geek.

    Love ya, hang in there, and have fun!
    Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    116520

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    The World written by jjd
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry