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    dots Submission Name: Just A HeartBeatdots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1110
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 909



    Description:
       I know it gets a little sketchy at the end.
    But thats just what the poem is.


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    dotsJust A HeartBeatdots
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    Can a heart still beat if it's been broken?
    Can a hawk still soar, when it's been clipped?
    Will a wiseman's proverbs go unspoken?
    Will the fabric of reality become ripped?
    Can you live for nothing more than just a heartbeat?
    Is there something out there better than the more?
    Is there really any reason for the coldfeet?
    Is there something waiting right behind the door?
    When someones says they love you, can you trust them?
    Do they really understand what was just said?
    Should you really do just what you when you must when?
    They tell you that they'll love you you when they're dead.
    Can they really understand, just what i'm thinking?
    Never will they really hear me out?
    I feel as if my hopes just keep on shrinking.
    How can people live there lives with so much doubt.




    Submitted on 2006-09-01 12:39:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is an amzing poem. it makes u think about a lot of things. i like how u pose questions like can a heart beat of its broken? etc etc...and if u really think about it e have all had our hearts broken...but yet we keep beating. its a very deep and intense poem. good work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      Doubt is the mother of all evil, doubt urself and u doubt everything. I like this, even though i want to answer all the questions asked, but i ask myself similar questions, so i'll leave them with out answers, cause u might not like the answers i give. excellent write.
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem. i like how you put the emotions into it and the questions you ask. joanna
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, i just found those messages today. I didn't even know they were down there. How do you write those anyways? I'm new to this.....
    Anyways, I liked this one as well. I'll agree that it became a little sketchy, but other than that it was great! Talk to ya later!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah
    i know what this means
    cause i think everybody asks these questions
    but i don't understand the line
    "Should you really do just what you when you must when?"
    idk if you accidentally missed some words
    if i'm just retarted or what
    haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]


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