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    dots Submission Name: Adoration part IIdots
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    Author: smalltown
    ASL Info:    37 female, smalltown ill
    Elite Ratio:    5.32 - 80/66/39
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsAdoration part IIdots
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    My hopes and prayers are for your heart to overflow in wonderous joys.
    Gentle soul, have many been blessed to know and understand your devine calling?
    Do you keep those most tender treasures locked away?
    Precious angel are you free and clear for the tempting?

    I have a lifetime of saved love to pour upon you.
    I want to drench you in satisfaction both mental and physical.
    I pray for your happiness...
    I want you to feel appreciated...
    to be loved and give love freely..
    to be unashamed to speak of anything with me.

    I imagine your soothing embrace...
    long to feel the warmth of your lips
    I ache to touch the personification of you as I trace the outline of your fiery paper passions.
    Seems so long since this Queen has been seduced through mystical electric waves.
    I find myself whispering as if conjuring some ancient voo-doo.
    Come to me? Come to me and languish upon insatiable bliss.

    I desire unlimited marvelous affections.
    Speak intoxicating sultry words laden with romance upon my neck until I shiver to the root of my essence.
    My unfailing amore I send to you Amaretto kisses sweetened by rays of honey dipped sunlight, carried on the intangible wings of silver glazed winds.
    I am inspiration gliding with chimmed freedom. Come to me ?.

    My king I yearn for your knowledge...
    I wish to serve you and be served by only you...
    trust me with your heart and emotions...
    completely...

    come grow old with me..
    Love me as I shall love you.
    Come rest and savor true goodness?.
    I am forever....
    Your Queen.....




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      You used a lot of great metaphors in this. I was honestly impressed with the language. You took it there girl! And I am trying to swim back to shore from the depths that you made me go!

    When one can earn so much of your attention.....it is a blessing to the both of you. You sound like you have a very positive and powerful heart. And you aren't afraid to speak on it.

    Such an emotion to overcome all else.

    I really like this one. I think I'll fav it!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem, I love the imagery! You're wording is magnificent. I like it because the poems descriptive but it's not over done so you got your point across. Honestly I wouldn't do anything to change the poem, I like it just the way is. Great job :)..

    Cris
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]


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