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    dots Submission Name: A night without youdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1041
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1264



    Description:
       Not much to say, I've not written for a while and I wanted to write a little something for the person I hope to be a part of for always.


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    dotsA night without youdots
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    A quick rundown of why Iím here,
    Of why I write you this,
    The reasons I find,
    Are so very clear, it is of course
    For you are not here

    My thoughts cannot reside on much; without your face to focus,
    And my eyes see blue wherever I look; unless my gaze is upon you
    My ears are used to not hearing your voice,
    But retain the sound of your giggle, throughout,
    My days, my nights, through the unconscious hours, and I swear,
    Each time I wake,
    I hear you there,

    I write this to you and to myself,
    To befly the confusion inside my brambled head,
    And with the hope that you will understand,
    As the better part of me,
    The numbness that remains when you are no longer,
    When you are not filling the space inside my head,
    When the feeling inside cannot decide
    Whether this vessel is alive,
    Or if this consciousness is mine,
    Or just a remnant of yours left behind

    I write you this so when you wake,
    You may know; your dreams of me are real,
    And if you feel a loneliness; it is but me,
    Trying to be free, and be a part of you,
    As you insist, of being part of me.




    Submitted on 2006-09-01 18:21:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wonderful read I'm glad I found this one.. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-11-04 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      A magnificent read... I enjoyed how you seemed to just write what came to mind. I too find myself thinking a lot about that certain someone in my life while they are gone. It's maddening! Kudos and keep it up!
    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]
      omg, i wa sliterally crying by the end of this. i'm in a long distance relationship, so i know exactally how you feel. this is a beautiful poem filled with emotion. awesome write, i'm faveing this.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Jenni Bean | [ Reply to This ]


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