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    dots Submission Name: who's better than us?dots

    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 425
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       me and troy just can't be stopped. going back and forth with no stops or interruptions

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    dotswho's better than us?dots

    (young p)
    You think youíre good, Iím better
    Iím more clever
    Wear a raincoat in any weather
    In case the forecast is tethered
    To the clouds
    Iíve been running for miles
    Through tribulation and trials
    Cabinets and files
    Through frowns and smiles
    I been going for a while
    But going and not getting anywhere is not my style
    Iím grown but still living as a child
    Whoís just been through the Jackson pedophile
    And itís vile
    To live like this
    Itís like I always gotta pee but I canít seem to piss

    (unknown soldier)
    When you sleep and allow your dreams to exist
    Reaching for the poison apple and I canít seem to resist
    Even the gates of heaven can crumble when the demons persist
    A broken puzzle of hip hop is of what these pieces consist
    Sick of the sorry reasons, convinced
    That thereís a myriad of emotions that can be gleaned from a kiss
    You and your girl can get the sweetest release from your lips
    Lost in Katrina and unable to get any kind of relief from the shit
    As my niggas disregard the rules and get beat like your dick
    And the worse sinners are the ones trying to reconcile on their knees like a BITCH

    This is what happens when we step in the booth
    Grab the mic and start releasing the truth
    These two kids are raw, niggas call em uncouth
    And we keep spitting like old men when theyíre missing a tooth

    (young p)
    In this battling thing Iím the best
    You a pawn, Iím a queen in chess
    No need for a vest
    Cuz I ainít aiming for your chest
    Iím aiming for your brain
    To drive your membrane insane
    Youíre not cold, youíre lame
    You get washed away like a stain
    That I can get out with ďGainĒ

    (unknown soldier)
    And the struggle on the streets is never contained
    Falling off track but trying to remain on the trainÖ
    ÖOf thought as I fought to maintain
    The same state of mind that sustains
    My hunger by giving food for thought to my brain
    Nobodyís to blame for your loss of fame
    And niggas freeze water just to claim to have ice on their chain

    This is what happens when we step in the booth
    Grab the mic and start releasing the truth
    These two kids are raw, niggas call em uncouth
    And we keep spitting like old men when theyíre missing a tooth

    Submitted on 2006-09-02 00:28:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved, Unknown Soldier's lyrics much better, there was alot of feeling and emotion in it, while young p was just defending himself. I love reading this kind of stuff. Keep going at it guys!
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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