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Carrying Your Love


Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 791
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Carrying Your Love



It's in the wind.
It's in the rain.
It's in every word,
When I say your name.

It's in the light.
It's in the stars.
It's with me,
where ever you are.

It's in the trees.
It's in the sky.
It's there by me,
From just one guy.

It's with me here.
It's with me there.
When I'm all alone,
And everywhere.

It's what I feel.
It's what I see.
I'm carrying your love,
It's always with me.






Submitted on 2006-09-02 14:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow... at first it was good...but then I thought it was too long... like I knew what the next line was, but then you tricked me... I was wrong.... And I love how you do that..... keep it up! :)
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Ellie Schneider | [ Reply to This ]
  Now there's a cool one, a happy chanting except for the last two sentences; you could spend some work on them because you stumble when chanting/reading.
But then, I might be wrong :-)

Greetzzzzz
roberto
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by roberto | [ Reply to This ]
  i know exactly what you are saying here, i wrote a poem a while back very much like this, plz read it, it's called 'i see it in the sunset'.
the structure of this piece is suited perfectly to the poem. your feelings are very clear.
lovely job,
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like the emotions behind the poem and for the most part the poem flows and has a consistent rhythem but their are a few spots where i found myself stummbling over the lines. Other than that though this poem is really good.

Selene
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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