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    dots Submission Name: Lonelinessdots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLonelinessdots
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    What do you do when you're all alone,
    With no one to talk to?
    What do you do when you cannot see,
    The door you are meant to walk through?
    What when love is not enough,
    And all you have is pain?
    The hope for tomorrow crumbles to dust
    Washed away by rain.

    I cannot see the furure,
    Am i trapped within the past?
    No question could be truer,
    As i cry amidst the laughs.
    I wish to embrace happiness,
    But all i taste are tears.
    In the hate of self that can exist
    When i must face my fears.




    Submitted on 2006-09-02 17:20:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is pretty depressing, phil. especially the part when u say u cry amidst the laughs. this is definitely gonna be a fave. i can't find anything wrong with it so it's definitely a classic in my opinion
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty depressing, phil. especially the part when u say u cry amidst the laughs. this is definitely gonna be a fave. i can't find anything wrong with it so it's definitely a classic in my opinion
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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