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    dots Submission Name: Letter to Andrewdots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 773
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    Description:
       A poem in honor for Thouched by Angel character, Andrew the Angel of death.


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    dotsLetter to Andrewdots
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    “Hi there.
    I know you don’t know me.
    Have never seen my face.
    But, I love you.”

    The rain cried
    A tear for every part

    “I have seen you around.
    Gazed into the dream.

    You were there,
    When grandma died.
    Only some weeks later
    You held my friends hand
    After the accident
    She told me.”

    The moon cried
    Two tears for every part

    “Did you not think
    That I could see you?
    A man of heaven
    Walking in shadows.
    Only for me to see.
    And them.

    The dead.

    God, you looked nice
    In that white suit.
    And those brown eyes
    That has kept me warm
    Ever since the first time
    I saw your face.

    A look of heaven.”

    The stars cried
    Three tears for every part
    .
    “I did see.
    An angel without wings.
    They asked me where I had been.
    My answer was always; at the hospital.
    You came for them. The dead.
    Liked you were there for grandma.
    And for Muriel, my friend.
    Where did you bring them,
    To heaven?”

    God cried
    Four tears for every part

    “I know you don’t know me.
    Have never seen my face
    But now I stand
    In your path.

    You will see me
    This time”

    She cried
    Five tears for every part
    And he came






    Submitted on 2006-09-02 17:55:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww this was so beautiful! it was so touching and sweet. i have seen the show once or twice, and so i'm not real framiliar with the characters. althought this character seems so right for your letter.

    "“Did you not think
    That I could see you?
    A man of heaven
    Walking in shadows.
    Only for me to see.
    And them.

    The dead."

    i dont know why, but this stanza reminded me so much of my grandfather who past away. i was close to him and i feel as though he is always near. this really made me feel close to him.

    "“I did see.
    An angel without wings.
    They asked me where I had been.
    My answer was always; at the hospital.
    You came for them. The dead. "

    these also were a few lines that stuck out to me. they are just very sobering and honest.

    my favorfite part of all though was the end:
    "She cried
    Five tears for every part
    And he came "

    you did a wonderful job with this write, keep it up!
    Di
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by Diarygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      admitibally i don't like touched by an angel. I do however Like the angel of death; he keeps it real. this is actaully very well comprised. and has a tranquil sentiment to it. I'm really not one for love peoms; but this one kept my interest(that's saying something!). However, one thing(though it doesn't seem quite necessary for this piece) is a lack of colour. Well take care, bye now
    | Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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