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Icy, Cold, Desert


Author: iluvpoetry_1
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ya i was in english class and it was HELLA cold! and then i looked out da window and saw a damn cactus!hope ya like it!
~akaila~
i dont noe wat it goes under so.... um... ya!


Icy, Cold, Desert



Icy, cold , wind
Slices into the dry air

Evergreen trees
Covered in delicate snow.

Iceicles hang frozen
On the tip tops of the lifeless trees

Angelic, virgin snow
Lays nicely on the silent grass

As the animals go into hibernation
While the plants begin to relax

I sit and look out the window
Staring at the cactus!

~akaila~




Submitted on 2006-09-02 19:06:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow.....akaila I dunno what to say, lol it wasnt' super great, it wasn't horrible it just made me laugh....I don't really know why, probably cause I can imagine u rambling about 'virgin snow' and cacti lols, u know I Luv you I just don't like this write too much...lol make troy comment on it, maybe he'll have some hangover-insight? :)
luv ya sis,
~jess
| Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Virgin snow brings about dirty thoughts te he! newayz i still think this is the bigest oxymoron eva. I realy wen the hell is it eva gone rain in da desert. I still love you even though you have a sort of wacky imagination. its like 1 in da mornin so i g2g 2 sleep.

~Gena~
| Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  what is jess talking about? hangover insight? is she trying to say that i'm an alcoholic? i resent that. well this one is weird. i didn't like the way u ended it but i thought that ur description of the cold winter like habitat was pretty good. maybe u should move to canada
| Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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