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    dots Submission Name: Freestyle Fantasticdots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 999
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1391



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    dotsFreestyle Fantasticdots
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    yo i was born to live forever within silicon disks man
    silly men that pretend to be blendsmiths with diskmen
    i risk life and limb to put words to pen to page
    you can't tell my age from the tribulations and trails i blaze
    i'm impressive in every sense of the concept
    i'm flawless on wax and suicidal like Osama bin Laden bombers
    Geofry Chacher on a binge, thanks for the Tales homie
    you stil owe me bail for that time spent in chain mail
    or should i say chain gang, fuck up that mainframe
    that systemic epidemic made to kep your brain caged
    playing the blame game with all guilty parties made of one man
    same trend of problems strung in bullets from the gun man
    some fan of mine with plan to spray a stage i'm on
    the same stage i made out of pillars and pylons
    pillows and mattresses, working the mathematical apparattus
    adding and subtracting backfliping my acts into acrobatics
    lyrics fractions of seconds mixed and chopped in pieces
    scattered thoughts food for the deacon or people suggesting treatment
    i do far more than talk shit bout shit
    that i bit or the cars that i drove
    or these stars that i strove
    to exist through in years to come
    i'm dumb in terms of sarcasm, pick up the guitar and strum, youngin




    Submitted on 2006-09-02 20:36:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You know homie, your writing and flows definately remind me of "Living Legends" . There are the parts that are so spontanious and out of the ordinary, and then POP! It all flows together like nothing.

    Check out the album "Almost Famous" by The "Living Legends" if you haven't already!
    Sick [censored] man!

    <peace
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      it's a monster, peej. i don't know how u do it. ur rhymes are so [censored] hard to follow but it's worth reading it. i'm loving ur [censored]. i'm glad u finally posted something. u should do it more often. it's a fave nigga
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      u rap so fukking weird. it seems so random but u can follow it from point to point if u REALLY pay attention. this [censored] damn near confused the hell outta me. still a fave though
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that's pretty cool. i wish i could hear it out loud. you definitely have skill that i admire. nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by beth freese | [ Reply to This ]


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