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    dots Submission Name: ...under yr wings...........dots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dots...under yr wings...........dots
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    you have been living life so sad.
    holding onto something you never had

    you fell in so deep.
    you've now learned all those things they teach
    and all those prayers that were unreached
    say goodbye to the demons
    say good bye to so hollow
    you've got a hold on tomorrow.

    you can't help it
    you can't save it
    you can't leave it
    only create it

    you have lived life so sad
    you've got another chance in something you know you could have.
    believe this..let it sink into your skin
    let it give you the strength
    to begin again

    say goodbye to the night
    say goodbye to so hollow
    its the wind under your wings
    its some kind of proof

    you've got a hold of tomorrow......







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      You have very good rhythm, and your last line, You've got a hold of tommorow, really punches the reader. This is good, but i feel like there is a part of it missing...i'm not sure exactly as to what, but it feels...incomplete
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]


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