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I Defy You

Author: rememberplaydoh
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I Defy You

Standing in defiance
I hold my head up high.
Wondering why
I took so long
to come to this place.

I could have spared myself some pain
If I had done this back then.
I had love,
but submission crushed
and tore it from my hand.

Sole victim?
I think not.
My choice hurt him too.
But now
I'm going to take a chance.
I'll take a stand.
This is for me.

I defy you.

Submitted on 2006-09-03 18:14:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like this poem; it has a flowing rythm and is very simple making it a treat to read. I like that you not only examined your own pain, but copped to the pain that you caused others as well. (That's not something we do enough.) My favorite line is, "I had love, but submission crushed and tore it from my hand". That part is a good representation of how easily we can have such precious things taken from us. This piece means to me that you have come to a place in your life where you are growing as a person and becoming stronger. Finding yourself and having the courage to come into your own can seem like it takes a lifetime, but once it starts it can be such a powerful force. I found it to be very uplifting and moving, we've all had times when we have to push ourselves to stand firm. Thanks for sharing and I hope to see some more.

Sarah Jane
| Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by SayJay | [ Reply to This ]
  rythem, idividualyty, characteristics of a good poet, youve got them, and you didnt make this to long either, some peoms are like chores, yours is like a a fleeting glimps were everything is in plain view. and the senserity makes it real. i can almost hear a growl just below the surface

keep on the keeping on
| Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]
  God, I wish I had your strength. I wish I could stand up to my ex and my parents and just say this, you know? *Sighs* I admire you.

The flow and the wording of the poem pulled at my heartstrings. I loved it.

| Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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