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    dots Submission Name: Crashdots
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    Author: andrya
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 508/419/62
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 933
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 369



    Description:
       Rusty... haven't written in agessss.

    Why pretend to be friends when everything said is an intentional low blow, dripping with sarcasm?



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    dotsCrashdots
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    My lips quiver
    As you satirize anything
    That once meant everything.

    Mocking,
    You make it impossible
    For me to stand myself.

    Blanketed beneath,
    Jeering significance
    In what your tone conveys.

    Your words say nothing,
    As a web of innuendos
    Traps the tension in.




    Submitted on 2006-09-03 21:09:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm. I see something hidden here. Perhaps I'm reading too much into it but is there more here than the superficial implication? Something about how you don't put a direct face on the person makes me think so. I find it intriguing in that way. I think it's fine form for a set of haiku. As for the rusty, I feel you there. I can't write at all lately- at least you still came up with something... I can't come up with [censored] myself. But I'm rambling- well done.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, sounds lame. i wonder why everyone cant just be a little nicer right? your poem is short but it definatly gets the point acrossed. your last part was my favorite, it sounds like there is a scream or snarl just below the surface.

    keep on the keeping on
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]
      You sound like you encountered a real loser. People who are all appearance and no substance. Sometimes enough is enough...
    I liked the imagery of the web at the end, in particular.
    Keep writing!
    -Jerome
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by azure_warrior | [ Reply to This ]


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