Hmmm. I see something hidden here. Perhaps I'm reading too much into it but is there more here than the superficial implication? Something about how you don't put a direct face on the person makes me think so. I find it intriguing in that way. I think it's fine form for a set of haiku. As for the rusty, I feel you there. I can't write at all lately- at least you still came up with something... I can't come up with [censored] myself. But I'm rambling- well done. -Q
yeah, sounds lame. i wonder why everyone cant just be a little nicer right? your poem is short but it definatly gets the point acrossed. your last part was my favorite, it sounds like there is a scream or snarl just below the surface.
You sound like you encountered a real loser. People who are all appearance and no substance. Sometimes enough is enough... I liked the imagery of the web at the end, in particular. Keep writing! -Jerome