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    dots Submission Name: dock of the baydots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 716
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1403
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 4273



    Description:
       this is a remake of a song by Ottis Redding. i pretty much took the hook and rapped about Life and Time. and i made chaz write a verse too.


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    dotsdock of the baydots
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    Just sitting on the dock of the bay
    Watching the tide roll away
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay
    Wasting time

    (unknown soldier)
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay watching my day goÖby
    Wondering if our descendants can unmask the hope we disguise
    Trying to open their eyes
    Most remain closed but doors open sometimes
    But opportunities fade
    The sight of the sands slipping can leave your community dazed
    The futureís frightening so we do what we gotta do to be brave
    Not many choose to behave
    But we cruise outta control until losers start choosing their graves
    We need answers
    So like Blue we search for the clues that we crave
    The dispute to get saved is turning into another excuse to get paid
    Leaving Time so I can dilute ítil I fade
    Iím getting mine without the sticks and stones tactics that you use to get laid
    Slipping outta Time so I throw up the deuce as I wave
    Overworking my mind the way the white men were using their slaves
    But whatís the use if we lose what we made?
    Sitting on the dock of the bay before my final commute to the page

    Just sitting on the dock of the bay
    Watching the tide roll away
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay
    Wasting time

    (heavy knowledge)
    Just sitting on the dock of the bay letting time past
    Remembering the good oleí times and wondering how long the bad will last
    Watching the sun slowly set in the evening sky
    Caught up in the world of deceit and lies
    Affected by all but only known to few
    You need to do a mix with a DJ and get a Clue
    Iím on more tracks than the 3 going to NYC
    You niggas canít rap, learn how to express yourself verbally
    Thinking about these things while Iím just sitting on the bay
    Still watching my life slowly fade away
    Cop on the grind trying to get me in a 5x5
    But already locked behind these rhyming bars yet still alive
    Aim for the moon and you might catch a star
    But looking up from the dock the stars look far
    Sitting here wondering how life rearranges everyday
    And still Iím just sitting on the dock of the bay

    Just sitting on the dock of the bay
    Watching the tide roll away
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay
    Wasting time

    (unknown soldier)
    Iím watching Time fly like American Airlines
    Chances are starting to disappear like an old personís hairline
    Itís like life is being manufactured on a conveyer line
    But how do we bear the times when hope fades and despair shines?
    The ďrole modelsĒ you follow who claim to be spitting that hot shit
    Get knocked unconscious and taken hostage as the hands on the clock tick
    The River of Time is pandemonium and I got lost in the mosh pit
    Time must mean nothing when your only objective is getting your cock licked
    As I try to stop this as you waste Time as you compete to be Top Bitch
    The loss of our innocence is a modern day massacre
    Because the worldís gonna end on the same day the Sabbath occurs
    Sentenced to torment because of your bad habits, deterred
    By religion so you hope that some form of magicís a cure
    Vision polluted, you canít grasp the picture since half of itís blurred
    Hail Mary, rest in peace, so those without faith wonder what happened to HER
    Tears scaring my soul so now my passionís obscured
    But itís clashing with the reactions of different factions since my every actionís observed
    Time and Life are both bitches who lack in remorse
    So I swim upstream the River of Time just to drown in the Source

    Just sitting on the dock of the bay
    Watching the tide roll away
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay
    Wasting time

    (unknown soldier)
    Just sitting on the dock of the bay watching my day go
    Watching time fly through these rhymes we create, yo
    Iím sitting on the dock of the bay watching my day pass
    Wondering if anything worthwhile that we made lasts




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      oh snap dizzels i thought this was original but i guess i was wrong but ive never heard otis redding so thats why.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this post. When i was reading it i thought it to h ave a medium flow you know not to fast n not 2 slow. THen i imagined you of course sitting on a dock about noonish and while your rapping little snipits of your life would be flashing n fadin in n out then it would fade from u 2 heavy knowledge n the same thing would happen n then your pic would fill half the screen n heavy knowledge would fill the half n both of you would have a reminecent looks on your faces while the beat fades out. Oh this would make such a good music video. newayz i loved it.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      i completely love this. the line "So I swim upstream the River of Time just to drown in the Source" is brilliant. i think this is my favorite you have done and i think i might say that about all the new ones i read ...hmm

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that I own that CD, and Otis Redding is one of my all time favorites. My father used to listen to that song and sing along with it every time that he heard it.....maybe that's why I like it so much.

    This was some hot sheeit. Honestly. The both of you definitely put it down on this one and I'm glad that I came by to read it!

    Only a few lines through me off a little bit....but I'm sure that when it's verbalized the effects are different.

    I applaud this piece.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, hope ur k, havnt commented on your work for quite a while now, but this one was amazin, i know i have said it b4 with ur work but this is my fave, its gonna be hard to top it, you decriped how you are feeling bout life tot the max,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo! I loved this! I feel you and Chad did your thing with this one. I too love this song. I always listen to it as a young girl and teenager. I may down load it one day now, just to hear it again. I feel you and Chad touched on issues that effect all races and took a stand to say that blacks are acting like they ain't got no sense at all. Your lyrics flowed well, and matched the theme of the original song. Hats off to you both! This is a fav.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i sing that [censored] at work. lol. its kinda funny yo, cuz people ask me all the time who sings it and i tell em sumthin different everytime. i think its funny, and [censored] u if u don't.
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was some poetic justice wit a straight RAP flow, it had some really good lines, amanda picked a good one.

    I figure the concept of this post to be ottis redding. BUt the modern lyrics and words you used to describe life in the shoes of someone living today, still do Otis's work justice.

    Unknown-you do well with putting your side or perspective on past writings/songs.

    heavey- you had some good lyricism and some insightful shlt to say also.

    nice post

    PC

    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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