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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    A split path , a history of sunsets , orange and red ,the sands of the mind , a car passes then passes again ,Iíve been here, id swear it .she was with me no, I was alone , and drunk. Wipe the dirt from my eyes brush off my pants .whereíd I leave my keys ? Did I walk? A car passes stereo blasting .its morning, Iím mourning. I wish it would rain




    Submitted on 2006-09-04 20:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounds like somthing happened and you woke up and was trying to fugure out exactly what the hell was going on. and I like the 'I wish it would rain' like the rain would clean away the confusion.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the first couple of lines. It seems like it is going to be about something beautiful... but then it turns into something a little more .. like lost, confused and lonely. You put enough into it to keep me interested and left enough out to leave me wondering.
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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