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    dots Submission Name: My Little Sisterdots
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    Author: LongPastDead
    Elite Ratio:    6.55 - 34/67/30
    Words: 377
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       To Diana, my newly declared little sister. This is for you, love, thanks for everything. And remember: I do care and so should you.


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    I drape my arms around her like a blanket full of warmth,
    to hide her from the worlds decrepit form.
    I show her that I care in all the things I do
    and make her feel safe with honored I love you’s.

    I declare I will always be there,
    my solemn pledge placed upon her downy head.
    I'll fight the fire and conquer the seas
    because she’s not just my best friend,
    but my little sister to the very end.

    Not by the blood in our veins,
    but by the hearts that renders it so sweet.
    I promise by her life and mine,
    this undeniable vow I will keep.

    The assurance that I will take the tears from her eyes,
    make them into gems,
    and scatter them to the wary twilight sky.
    The pledge to take her fears from her heart,
    make them into nothing,
    and banish them into the night so dark.

    So when she looks upon the horizon’s face,
    she will always know that the love I have for her,
    and the measures I will take.
    The miles, distances, and hells I would walk,
    just to let her know that nothing is her fault.

    Know this, my dear, take these words in kind,
    because everything I say and do,
    is all fully dedicated just to you.

    Nothing your ignorant parents say is close to the truth.
    What those vial men have done,
    is everything but right by you.
    I told you that you were worth caring about.
    And some day, little sister, you will figure it out.

    You will know exactly what I see,
    when I look into your eyes so full of pain.
    You will find out the angst (and delight) I feel,
    when you desperately call out my name.
    You will finally know what it is to be loved.

    But until that day I will never let go,
    and even then I will always be there.
    Because I’m your big sister and no matter what,
    I will always care.




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 02:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This piece was beautiful, as you well know. The adoration and the potent love of your little sister was inspiring, to say the least. You have a way with words, there's no doubt about it. You made this poem with your wonderfully loving heart, and poetry that is straight from the heart, is timeless. It is very admirable too, the deep connection you felt with her after just having met her. Great poem written by a great person.

    -J
    | Posted on 2007-12-09 00:00:00 | by Forest Saint | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for asking me to read this. I must say this is beautiful. It touched me, in so many ways. It's good to have someone that dear to you. Especially Diana, I have only known her for a few days and I can see in her what you do. She's lucky to have someone like you in her life. I hope to read more of your writings, and look forward to talking to you in chat. Take care.

    ~Amy
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by javajunkie | [ Reply to This ]
      *honestly bawling her eyes out right now*

    I don't....I can't even say anything......


    *hugs you tearfully*


    ~Diana, Your Little Sister
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I read the other side of this and I was touched. It is great that you share such a close bond with someone. I am not completely sure about the situtation, but I guess that is personal. I beautiful, emotional and heartfelt write.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like Abbas said, this feels very personal, so I'm not going to say a lot. I do enjoy reading poems like these. Where people have extremely close relationships to one another. I have to admitt though, it makes me extremely sad, because I have never felt so close to anyone my entire life. Not even to my own sisters!
    This was truly beautiful. I loved every word of it, and after reading your sisters coment, I can see that she is feels so happy. It's great that you guys have eachother.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      you know what this poem made me feel loved as i put my self in that possition of your little sister and she will grow to be a great girl to have you as a sister anyone would you have your way with words pulling the strings of my heart i just wish i knew a love like this your very talented looking forward to more entrys

    Rak^)
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]


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