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    dots Submission Name: Lingering Memories dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
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       it may not make sence lots going through my mind at the moment


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    When i sit in the back seat of a car and a I look in the passengers side mirror it all comes back to me
    The words spoken to me as if in slow motion...
    The trees getting further away as my sanity drifts away with them...
    The words spoken so confently they slid right off her tongue...
    "Your never seeing him again, he'll never be in your life again.."
    And all I can do is cry out... screaming...
    But my cries seem to be silent in that vehicle I was in...
    My cries only seemed to echo within my ears...
    This woman in the passenger seat... was known to me as my Aunt...
    Who hasn't been in my life since I was 7...Now being 14... all I can do is wonder where the hell she's been?
    Nevermind that
    Why does she decide to appear now...
    She mentions to me as my screams are echoing within these ears of mine..
    "God does not put us through things that we can not over-come"...
    Who the hell is this lady??
    I have just been taken from my Uncle's, this man has betrayed me
    Same goes for the man who betrayed me for years the man my Mother speaks of...
    The two men I had undying love for
    The two men known to me has family
    Are also the two men who have hurt me the most?
    Who have caused me wounds
    When thoughts of past events come to me
    Its as if pouring salt onto them
    Making me twitch and bleed...
    But this does not bother you...
    My twitching body...
    No, you love this reaction...
    You love getting any kind of reaction from me
    Because you know just as well as I do
    That "love" will never...NEVER be a reaction.
    So you push any buttons possible..
    But the one you want...
    The one you are longing for
    You have not... and
    WILL NOT FIND




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      This is so good
    You are showing us your readers your inner strength
    You show us that no matter what noone can get to you deep enough to cause a total negative reaction
    AMEN
    That shows how strong you truly are
    I can see you have been through a lot in life and I am truly deeply sorry
    I too have been through this same abuse
    Every kind of abuse you can imagine but never by my parents
    I will be Praying for you
    Please remain strong
    I know in my Heart you are going to come out a winner in life!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very deep. Spoke right to my heart. Reminds me of things that have happened to me in my own life.
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by Fairy Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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