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    dots Submission Name: Beer Soaked Angeldots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBeer Soaked Angeldots
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    Your face tired
    Yet I still admired.
    Let me be your inspiration.
    You take my hand with hesitation.
    You wonder if this is fate.
    Trust me today and let this love permeate.
    This Love is like a fine wine.
    Lets fall into each other and just unwind.
    And from your face I drink.
    Our souls in a toast clink.
    You have a fine head on your shoulders.
    Foam running over.
    The world has made it frothy but you're bolder.
    Your beer stained tears have all but disappeared.
    The empty mug of despair leaves me well impaired.
    Such a waste youíve lost lifeís taste.
    But you leave no repent
    Waterfall of alcohol away Iíve sent.
    You are my choice hops of the world.
    My beer soaked angel girl.




    Submitted on 2004-01-26 21:36:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Also, the back-n-forth from "she" to "you" is a little confusing, but it works. <><
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]


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