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    dots Submission Name: Math Class Herodots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 962
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1959



    Description:
       high school drop trou

    late ensemination

    how to disarm a hot chick from math class

    LOL


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    dotsMath Class Herodots
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    love me
    i want you to hug
    like you’ve never embraced a nut case before
    show me a safety grab
    i know your not a skater fag
    but later for that jocular jazz
    ill see you in math class
    handing you pencils behind my back girl
    thats exactly how a boyfriend should act and you know it
    and i know i don’t always show this
    and i deserve a brow beating for it
    show my porous heart on tour with jimmy eat your heart
    im too far in to ever consider restarting
    she’s departing,
    off the chemistry
    to ponder on if we’ll bond
    and i’m singing swan songs
    thinking tomorrow morning math, you’ll be gone
    and in any event, if you come or stay home
    would i be wrong?
    would i be so shallow to be believe a sleepy hollow horror flick could pick up a chick as good-spirited as you?
    even if i gave a couple pens here and then
    i'm hearing things from over there, that you thought i was a lunatic
    you may be true
    Shiiiiiit
    i may be something new to you, but truthfully
    i'm beautiful in my right index finger's cuticle
    you've seen it, reaching for a #2 from a looney toon
    i must be reaching to the moon for some high school drama
    i'll go home and tell mama
    "I got a girlfriend"
    "she gives me my pencils back after i let her keep em"
    "isn't she a gem?"
    and i keep telling her, telling myself in the act
    that i'll see it when i believe it and tomorrow she'll be mine
    i'd make scenes in my head
    day dreams instead of real things
    im just hoping that this game plays itself out
    and we can roll out in that psyche ward ambulance
    we'll be special like words followed by ampersands
    or 25 year olds playing candy land




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 10:50:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is adorable babe. Definitely captured the head over heels crush. Makes me think of Duke in She's the Man. Absolutely adorable. Ttys kiddo.
    Hannah
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      this possibly takes the cake for the weirdest thing u've ever written and since i consider every one of ur writes to be strange as phuck that's saying something. i liked the focused ADD idea that narcolepsy said. it does describe u in a way. i think u captured the whole puppy love thing very well and in a very creative way. great job man. i still consider u one of the most creative minds on Elite
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i absolutely adore this. it's amazing. it's exactly what i wish were going through a guy's head when he looks at me. your word play is striking and it's got a sarcastic sense of humor. i can't even pick a favorite line because i love the whole thing. there is a boy in my math class, in fact, that i'm kind of hoping would notice me in this way... heh. these are the kinds of things that go through my mind when i like someone too. your style is kind of like focused ADD if that's possible. that's kind of an oxymoron i guess. haha.

    but of course, i must tell you what you could improve on. the way this is broken up into lines is kind of scattered-brained. it sounds more like stream of conscienseness rather than a poem... so my suggestion is either put it into lines, even it out in meter, or don't break it into lines at all. i had no trouble reading it but it looks kind of messy this way.

    great write! i hope to see more from you. <3
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]


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