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    dots Submission Name: Vile Valentinedots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 1213
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This was suppose to be my last poem.
    Unfornatly it didn't go as planned.
    Hope you like.


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    dotsVile Valentinedots
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    Flip to the last chapter, in the book of mine.
    You'll read in full detail, my Vile Valintine.
    Mark the day of my death.
    The beggining of new life.
    Need no noose, water, gun, or knife.
    Just a pill.
    Nine or ten.
    My death will come, i weonder when.
    The pain will stop.
    I'll start again.
    I won't fuck up.
    This time i'll win.
    I'll be reborn, into a life.
    Free of anger and the strife.
    I will have power.
    Just wait and see.
    Take a couple hours.
    These pills in me.




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 13:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Rhyme and the structure is very good and fits the piece very well. It was easy to read and I enjoyed it.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think I've found a poem of yours that I haven't liked yet. The way you write, I really don't think that's even possible, lol. I really really like this one because it really fits my mood now, so that's a plus....... Talk to ya later!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]


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