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    dots Submission Name: **Choicesdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Rant/
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    dots**Choicesdots
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    Choices come with life
    And life comes with choices
    That's just something you've got to live with
    Me, you picked to be your friend
    And I'm happy for that decision.
    He picked you and you said yes
    And that leaves me out of the picture
    I said I don't feel left out
    But in my heart it hurts
    Hurts that you have time for him
    But don't pay me the time of day
    Hurts that you'd rather be with him over me
    Well that's fine, I can live
    But to be hurt with your choices
    Your choices that affect my life
    My life which I only live once
    He will only be with you for a couple months,
    maybe years
    But if you care for me nd let me grow
    I could be with you for a lifetime
    Don't let him tear us apart
    Him, what am I saying
    It's your decision
    Go on as you may
    But just remember
    I'm being left here in you dust
    Of the decisions made
    By you.




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 15:25:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i have been kind of molded by other peoples decisions and when you realy care for them and there choise hurts you but you also want them to be happy you have to be the stronger one and deal with it and stick by that person and in some cases it can prove to be tough and i like the way you showed this emotion in your rant it seemed like you were talking to your self in the mirror but you were talking as if you wanted to say it to that person but didnt i also like that. realy cool on a whole keep it up

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    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice rant...although that is all it is, just a rant...sort of a more of a selfish type rant. Yes being the odd man out in a friendship certainly does bring these feelings and as you hint to, perhaps the choice will separate you or bring you that much closer over time...only time will tell. Be glad that your friend is happy, if only for a short while...just be there if their illusion of happiness fails...and if it turns out to not be an illusion...then all the better.

    Anyway, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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