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    dots Submission Name: how it feelsdots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    Description:
        hate turns into pain,love never changes only hurts


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    pain and suffering
    they trick you in
    then wont you let you out
    it hurts the most because you trusted them so
    loved them,belived them and no
    you never stoped to second geuss them
    then they hurt you tear you apart
    put you through pain
    endless nights of crying
    not beliving that whole time they were lieing
    you sit there dieing inside
    a promise,a love,a sisterhood
    betrayel,hurt,tears
    you cant find in your heart to break away
    so here youll stand another day
    heart to heart hand in hand
    you seem to sink as if in quik sand
    and inch by inch you cry away your life
    its more painfull then death by knive
    like they say to love is the slowest form of suicide
    iI now belive it,very much so when they set you up with a non existent person




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 16:24:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your heart wasnt broken at this time, it was torn. i love the raw emotion you have in it. all i can say is the experience was a lesson in life. i can only hope you learned from it.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't believe I am the only one to comment on this. I would love to see you expand on this. Certainly many people on the giving side of this level of hurt could stand to read this and see how their actions affect others.

    "I now belive it,very much so when they set you up with a non existent person" Is this a metaphor or is it meant to be read at face value. That is the only thing that is unclear.
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]


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