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    dots Submission Name: **Guiltydots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 652
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 591



    Description:
       I'm on a streak of bad writing. This is the third of the set. Hopefully I will get my good writing back and be able to deliver some enjoyable reads.


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    dots**Guiltydots
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    I feel guilty
    Accusations
    I didn't mean it
    Can't you see that
    Lost like a dog
    Without its trusted owner
    Only I am not owned
    Just feel it

    I feel guilty
    For writing this
    I shouldn't have opinions
    Keep them in here
    My head
    Shut Up
    Be silent so only the worthy will see
    Just ssshhh.

    I feel guilty
    So I will leave
    Before the hitting and throwing
    Commences
    Before my eyes
    Lock them, Don't look
    Obey.




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 16:30:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I find this style of writing very unique. It doesn't rhyme, yet you lace your emotions and message through it where it has just as much meaning and feeling as a write that rhymes or has some kind rhythm to it. Very nicely done here! This write also goes along with my mood today so that's a plus as well ^_^

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]


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