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    dots Submission Name: Gonedots
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    Author: FailureXX
    ASL Info:    15/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 7/19/10
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 132
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1360



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    dotsGonedots
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    Without you, I am nothing.
    Always find myself in search of something.
    When you're away, The seconds pass much too slow.
    Ask myself, "why did you have to go?"
    You cannot understand this,
    My thoughts are but a twist.
    You were the one, who made me whole.
    You've played, my most important roll.
    Everything was at once so worth while.
    But now I'll say goodbye in style.

    Without you, I am nothing.
    Always find myself in search of something.
    Farewell my love, I'm gone from you.
    Gone from all I cannot do.
    This is by far the worst,
    I'm just a suffer of this thirst.
    Hello again, back so soon,
    Or is this just, a shadow in the room?
    everything was at once so worth while,
    but now ill say goodbye in style.

    Without you, I am nothing,
    Always find myself in search of something.
    My tears, they drown the best of you,
    So why I love you, i have not a clue.
    Save me from this hell,
    You were so lovely when you fell.
    I've got no reason to watch it anymore,
    You've ripped my heart an open sore.
    Everything was at one, so worth while,
    But now I'll say goodbye in style.
    Say goodbye in style.




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 19:02:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very well written.
    I felt the emotion portrayed into this piece.
    I'm sorry you have been hurt.
    I to have been hurt, so i can relate.
    Saying Good-bye in style.......beautiful
    Well written.
    Write on.

    Valle_Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      This really touched my heart...it triggered an old memorey that remains close to my heart. I think you did a wonderful job portraying your feelings in this piece. I really liked the way you ended the first two stanzas with "Everything was at once so worth while.
    But now I'll say goodbye in style."
    and the last one with" Everything was at one, so worth while,
    But now I'll say goodbye in style.
    Say goodbye in style" The flowed remained steady throughout. All in all very well done.
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]



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