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    dots Submission Name: Marionette Reflections with SinCeer05dots

    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 318
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My colaberation with SinCeer05

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    dotsMarionette Reflections with SinCeer05dots

    Latent smiles..
    dancing, sauntering cross my world of dreams.
    Tuned laughter..
    disappearing, dissipates into the blue sunrise.
    Dance for me..
    my little porcelain dolls,
    I will dress you,
    adorned in satin dresses and lace garbs

    Foot prints..
    echoes, etched across the fine sand
    Laced and coiled..
    decorated with broken marionette strings
    Play with me..
    my beautiful mannequin geisha's
    I will treat you,
    with tender love and soothing care

    Be joyous..
    My exquisite manufactured puppets
    reflections hid..
    obscured behind tumultuous reality's waters
    Stay away..
    conceal yourself from the water's edge
    I don't want the paint
    to smear or wash away

    Manipulating your strings...
    entombed in the shadows yonder.
    Far from controlling,
    like dreams and fate to ponder.
    the reality of a world detached
    Manifested passion,
    seeing the girl twirl, still attached.

    I knew I was ...
    seduced, infatuated with you
    Through the rush,
    Thoughts of obtuse mandated views
    Your innocence
    loyal silence, elements to show
    Hollow essences,
    soiled finesse, tormenting all I know

    Evolving emotions...
    As the nights go with marionettes adorned
    Tangency of beauty
    Centered to revolve while I reflect, my little girls perform
    Flaunting satin laces
    To drape the curves of porcelain
    with daunting measures
    To escape the cold world from within

    Around dark eyes...
    Black strings of hair sway
    engulfed in beauty
    a world off innocence is portrayed
    untouched an isolated
    till the evening comes an our paths twine
    I blush to paint ruby wine cheeks
    lushes feelings of gay

    Unsacred perceptions
    for my dolls to beware
    The evil inside
    Deceptionís hatred is appalling to bare
    Stay strong and gentle
    With poignant confessions and stares
    These toys awaken me
    Without the cruel intentions
    Of a world of puppets I truly care

    Submitted on 2006-09-05 20:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was creepy as phuck. i still loved it though. u and SinCeer did really well on this. i bet his parts were the ones with the most rhyming. i know his style by now. i was suprised at how well u captured this idea of being caretakers for the people of the world as u see them as puppets. still weird though
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good, it made me think and its form and structure are impressive, it is obvious that you have a strong command of the english language.
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]

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