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    dots Submission Name: Sense of Directiondots
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    Author: Fey
    ASL Info:    28/f/us
    Elite Ratio:    5.93 - 67/59/29
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSense of Directiondots
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    Lost was I, the roads leading me nowhere
    I was a wanderer in this quest of true love.
    Always right behind me, this lonely fear
    what if I could not find my way

    I thought it a myth, an unattainable treasure
    a love more precious than what shines and shimmers
    I had traveled far and near, distances most immeasurable
    that I had almost given up this plight of love

    Then on some road that lead nowhere, we collided!
    ...a crash that changed both our destinations.
    To share the maps of our futures, we decided
    and together traverse these winding roads of our lives.

    As we travel in directions unknown,
    I got lost in my love for you.
    So much beauty and trust you have shown,
    that I must believe in your sense of direction.





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      The ending was definately the strongest point of the piece. And, honestly, at first, while going through it, I thought that the initial stanzas were a bit too... cheesy. Too... colorful to stand out among the large assortment of love stories. But as I finished it, I realized that that flambouyance worked. It gives the piece a sense of... growth. And the growth itself is a very powerful instrument.

    Just goes to show that you can't judge a book by its cover.

    Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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