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    dots Submission Name: Choicesdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 526
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1315



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       uhh About my mother.. what a surpise!


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    dotsChoicesdots
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    All choices I have and are making
    Are made out of spite
    Are made out of rage!...
    For I do not make my own choices..
    My chocies have already been made!
    For I seek reveage..
    On the one person
    Whom made choices in which hurt me more
    ... OH so more than any human being could possibly imagine!
    My life is drasicly different...
    This home I live in has changed for the worst...
    This bed I sleep in is simply not the same.
    All because of another's choice..
    A choice in which effected me to a degree that is so unique to say the least..
    One choice..
    A choice ..
    A dection made by another human being..
    Effected me ... to this point
    Is it possbile??
    That I can be effected to this length that I am..?
    Is it possbile that ...
    This... this pain is concrete
    Is actual?
    Or am I simply delusional to all the events that obtain this choice that has in turned... changed my entire life..
    Life to what I knew it as..
    Is no longer that..
    My friends..
    To whom I loved and cared for..
    Are no longer..here
    So... because of another's choice..
    Because of them..
    I'm starting over..
    Where do i begin?




    Submitted on 2006-09-05 23:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it has a lot of feeling in it which is lovely...it is a piece that touches a person but at the same time doesnt want any help from anyone....
    pretty much you're good, but you left out the "t" and "l" in drastically

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    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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