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    dots Submission Name: Drifting awaydots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       this is just a bunch of rant, i hope that it makes some kind of sense.


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    dotsDrifting awaydots
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    is this truly something that you want?
    will you turn around & walk back through the door.
    is it something you'll think twice about?
    it is something that will tear us down.
    have you made your decision?
    is one of us gonna be the one left out?


    will you turn back around and break my heart.
    am i playing my part?

    for every thought i give a thousand little sea shells filled with ocean
    i take back all the times i felt complete with every stolen moment .....
    is the truth something you deceive?
    i take back all those times i believed
    .... life could have a new beginning......

    is this just going to tear us down
    is one of us going to be the one who walks out?
    in a new light i see the truth right in front of me
    you leaving gave me the time to look a little deeper
    that life could have a new beginning for me

    is this truly something you thought twice about?








    Submitted on 2006-09-06 00:22:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you sound lost in your thoughts
    and it makes me think
    of the many times i was lost
    but i'am Glad to have someone talk too now
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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