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    dots Submission Name: A moment in historydots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 1058
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 957



    Description:
       A poem about me and two of my friends. :)

    Please tell me what you think of this latest attempt at poetry.

    Yony, you were write ;) (hee hee, mind the pun), I was trying to go to bed last night and this POPPED into my head out of nowhere.

    Enjoy


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    dotsA moment in historydots
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    A moment in history

    A documentation of three friends,
    On a mission to change the world for the best.
    With nothing but feeling, and
    A pile of lettering done by hand.
    A poem that shs true friendship,
    Struggling together to make it.
    Each letter showed another trust,
    Which the writers believed wouldn't dust.
    These friends parted, with tears cried,
    Not changing the world, but theirselves inside.
    Instead they beheld the solved mysteries,
    Of who they were, they things no one sees.
    They grew with eachother as one,
    Parting alone when their journey was done.
    They took away values that had been taught,
    Creating a story that cannot be bought.
    Turning over stones, better unturned,
    But each step, was a new lesson learned.

    What happened to them? I cannot say.
    A moment in history, is what they remain.




    Submitted on 2006-09-06 07:11:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww this one made me smile because I too have two best friends who mean the world to me. I know that without them I would be worse off than I am now. I love seeing testaments to friendship! Simple yet compassionate.

    <3 Jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]


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