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    dots Submission Name: Warrior Matesdots
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    Author: Ocker7290
    ASL Info:    44/Male/Cairns, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 54/22/11
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 165
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    Description:
       A soldier friend gets deep into depression after his deployments overseas and is starting to lose control and begins making mistakes at work and with his family


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    WARRIOR MATES

    Warriors mates sound the call
    One of your own has taken a fall
    He finds it hard to stay the fight
    He’s drifting down into the night

    Warrior mates don’t let him go
    He has to see that you know
    He wants your help to see it through
    He knows that some have been here too

    Warrior mates the clan must gather
    The family is all that can really matter
    Don’t ever let another stray
    Not tomorrow, not even today

    Warrior mates I see you’re strong
    See you coming, hopefully not long
    Hear your calls, they seem quite loud
    Warrior mates make us feel so proud


    Ocker7290




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    ||| Comments |||
      I really enjoyed this poem alot the expression is very well written and I can relate my pop was in vietnam and he had flashbacks alot of the time.
    this does have a very patriotic feel to this write so keep up the great writing.

    Ladymustang
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I can relate to this alot. I am now retired from the service and I know the feelings of being seperated from family and friends for long periods of time. I find that you have captured part of that here in your write.
    The call to arms is a hard life to live and at time it seems that its not worth the cause.
    Patriotic causes are always good if it is for the right reason. The problem is that the soldier does not get to choose his battles per say. He goes where his country needs him.

    I like this alot and it does hit home.

    Keep them coming.

    Enjoyed this write.

    Respect and Admiraton

    CLyde
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. has a proud patriotic feel.
    your flow was excellent.
    very nice indeed.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]



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