Description: This is for someone I loved very deeply. Weird circumstances ended our relationship. And than the same problem that had risen before we dated the first time came back when we discussed getting back together.
To him;
You think you need to protect me from yourself. I wish you'd realize that you can't, its not your place. I love you. And I'm sorry that you can't see how much I need you to make a decision. You think you'll ruin my life.. -sigh- I hope you read this.
No more games you said in your journal love thats all there is to it. Games of the heart games of the mind.
Your poem is sad not the greatest but the one that touches all who reads it. a matter of improvement? i do not see one. It has so much emotion in every line. You would think your heart would have burst when you created your last line.
Love is to bring on sadness. No one told me love would be the death of all thats inside of me. its a sad day when those who wish to protect you only hurt you more. This poem says it all and i sadly agree with it. Will the pain ever go away? that is all i can ask myself when i think of him. will i ever find that answer? that i have no answer to. love makes us blind pain makes us see. Hold him in your heart then one day you may be free.
This holds alot of emotion, which leads me to wonder at the story behind it. I don't think it really needs critiqueing, cause you and i think 2 much alike!
Submission Name: Painful Protection
