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    dots Submission Name: Bounddots
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    Author: AmandaLyn
    ASL Info:    18/F/ Centralia
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 292/292/42
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 107
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1355



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       so yeah I'm married and things aren't too peachy right now...


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    dotsBounddots
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    Sometimes I dont' know how

    sometimes I dont' know why

    I dont' wanna stay

    I just dont' wanna try.

    You say you love me

    but you dont' act like you do

    You want me

    but you never say it's true





    It's killing me inside

    all these times I've cried

    But I still love you

    more than ever before

    but why do I still

    wanna run for the door



    I dont' know if I can keep this up

    it feels like a facade.

    I dont' know if I'm just chasing a dream

    looking for that mirage.

    I have to and I must

    even though my dreams for a happy life

    may have turned to dust.



    Did i make the biggest mistake of my life

    tell me did you ever want this?

    Was this meant to be,

    or were we doomed with our first kiss.

    But I love you, I'll love you forever

    this has to work, it has to be

    no matter what happens

    for we are bound through all eternity.




    Submitted on 2006-09-06 12:24:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's very nice I suppose, and heartfelt but I don't like the use of the word "wanna". It sounds childish and unpoetic. Maybe consider changing it to "want to"?
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]
      Gee, nice piece. I feel the pain, although the sun is out, this poem makes me want to look for rain. Good luck A. L. I hope it works out for you.


    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]



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