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    dots Submission Name: Full Moondots
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    Author: EmpathicAya
    ASL Info:    13+8/unMale/Your Mind
    Elite Ratio:    7.31 - 700/456/109
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1075
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       This excited me to write. Its not great, but I love it all the same. I made it sound scary, though it wasnt intentional. Merry Esbat. *cackles*
    By the way, I did not make up the chant in the quotes. Its a well known chant most Wiccans sing at the opening of a cast circle. Freestyle!!!
    ~Azura*
    PS: Should I remove the 4th Stanza or no?


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    dotsFull Moondots
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    Clouds gather anxiously to protect the people
    Hiding the moon,
    Delaying the inevitable.

    The magick in the air cannot be stopped.
    The rushing of our blood cannot be dammed.
    Here on this night, we gather.
    Using her radiance to shape our own reality.

    Foot to foot, the drum beats climax.
    We spin until the stars above spin with us.
    Laughter seeping throughout the air above us,
    We raise our arms, emancipating the energy we borrowed.

    And it dance it's own dance
    Breathed it's own breath,
    Making itself something more,
    Returning to where it once resided.

    "By the Air that is her breath,
    By the Fire of her bright spirit,
    By the Waters of her womb,
    By the Earth that is her body.
    The circle is open, yet unbroken,
    May the peace of the Goddess be ever in our hearts.
    Merry Meet, and Merry Part,
    And Merry Meet Again.
    "

    And the moon shone down on us,
    The clouds yielding to her grandeur,
    Knowing the real magick of the night.






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      Wow! Very impressive - this appeals to me primarily because there are not enough people aware of the 'Granduer' of paganism. This explains perfectly the feeling of casting in the night, under the full moon - when you can feel not only the breath of every coven member there, but you can start to feel the very breath of magyk itself. You capture the feelings so wonderfully, and I believe it is damned good work on all levels, contrary to what you said in your discription, lol - it is great. Magnificient, even! I have nothing to pick on . . . it makes my formalist side feel restless, hehe.

    Take care!
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Starless Knight | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Azura,

    I like this, it has a feel of being present as the chanting begins.
    I see a typo you might want to fix though, in "damed" I think
    you need another "m", so it's "dammed".

    Other than that the rhythm is easily felt and the action, even as the air is a character, all works very well. Blessings for sharing this night of prayer with us.

    Love and light,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Azura,

    Nice stuff. It reminds me of a particular circle I was part of under such a moon.

    This is well said, a classic of mystic experience.

    To connect with the earth I often sing/chant
    Earth my body
    Water my blood
    Air my breath
    and fire my spirit

    I very moved by the feeling in this.

    Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Aya,

    long time no seen. How have you been? I love anything that deals with Wiccans although i don't really follow it very much. Still it interests me a lot.

    About the piece. Not much to complain about except be very careful with your grammar and your vocabulary. I also think you need to change the title somehow into something a little bit more wiccan so that it will arouse the interests of those who aren't really interested in this stuff.
    But seriously, overall, i really enjoyed reading this. It has your own style and it has a lot of potential...
    Wish i had more time but i'll check out more of your stuff later.
    Just wanted to stop by and say that this was very nice to read.

    Take care....
    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Azura, this is instilled with power and as the potential to be a super piece. I really like the feeling that you've put in it, takng the reader into the scene well.

    A bit of polishing and it will be great! Very well done

    be happy

    Graeme

    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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